Thanks again, James! I think you're right about the typeface. Funky and cool is fine, but when it comes across as clunky and cluttered, attention is needed. The existing design is easily edited into a slab serif look of it's own, or I can work with a couple of other options and see if that enhances the overall feel of the entire piece.
I am beginning to see the virtues of working in a design firm, or of just being able to receive outside critiques. Briefbox has proven invaluable in my general development as a graphic designer. The things I've learned from the considered, constructive comments have enhanced my capacities overall. I'm grateful for that and I feel the money I've spent on the Pro option has paid itself back in spades.
Hey Chris, thanks for another great submission. I think the general theme and layout works well, and the composition of the main information is fine. The elegant, subtle lighting leads the viewer's eye down into the typographic crest which holds the main information nicely. The date and time is clear and is positioned as a central focus, which is key in a piece of promotional material which will only be viewed for a limited time.
The only thing I'd change is the typeface you've used for the 'Eighty Twos', I just don't think it's legible enough... remember the brief asked for 'accentuated angles and simple typefaces.' I think this one may be slightly too illegible and it doesn't compliment the other typefaces you've used. Perhaps you could try a narrow sans serif or a slab serif typeface to mix it up?
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